A short chapter. The first scene was going to end chapter eight, but then that chapter ended up longer than usual, so I moved it here. It would have been a sucky cliffhanger anyway—I think just about everyone had to be seeing this one coming. Let me repeat: origins story. Those stories always have people important to the main characters getting hurt or killed, giving the MC drive and purpose...and an origin, so to speak. BUT, I didn't kill this particular character, so ha! Bet that surprised the readers who know me.
I wasn't completely happy or even satisfied with this chapter. It could be the lack of Michael. But there's also a big problem with me not knowing hospital procedures, so I had to kind of flub my way through that one. I don't have the slightest clue if there would be any way to get her to see him in the hospital, but I did it anyway. If you can suspend your disbelief for the magic, just try to keep it going, okay? And I liked that, despite Levi being so pissed at Sage, he would do what he could to get her in to see Hayden.
And for fun, here's a line I cut after Hayden asks Sage jokingly if she's part of the gang, and she says sort of...he was going to reply: “Whatevah! I run with twelve gangs and we only commit hate crimes! Whatevah, I'll do what I want!” But I figure I should cut down the TV show references, 'cause otherwise that seems pretty random, and I wasn't sure if I could come up with a convincing argument as to why Hayden watches South Park (it's really not his thing and he certainly wouldn't quote it.).
The “memory” scene of Sage's, just between Hayden's attack and the start of the hospital scene, was added during edits…I just really like them as a couple and felt they needed another moment together.
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"She wrapped evil around her like a large, evil Mexican serape."
Author Commentary
A short chapter. The first scene was going to end chapter eight, but then that chapter ended up longer than usual, so I moved it here. It would have been a sucky cliffhanger anyway—I think just about everyone had to be seeing this one coming. Let me repeat: origins story. Those stories always have people important to the main characters getting hurt or killed, giving the MC drive and purpose...and an origin, so to speak. BUT, I didn't kill this particular character, so ha! Bet that surprised the readers who know me.
I wasn't completely happy or even satisfied with this chapter. It could be the lack of Michael. But there's also a big problem with me not knowing hospital procedures, so I had to kind of flub my way through that one. I don't have the slightest clue if there would be any way to get her to see him in the hospital, but I did it anyway. If you can suspend your disbelief for the magic, just try to keep it going, okay? And I liked that, despite Levi being so pissed at Sage, he would do what he could to get her in to see Hayden.
And for fun, here's a line I cut after Hayden asks Sage jokingly if she's part of the gang, and she says sort of...he was going to reply: “Whatevah! I run with twelve gangs and we only commit hate crimes! Whatevah, I'll do what I want!” But I figure I should cut down the TV show references, 'cause otherwise that seems pretty random, and I wasn't sure if I could come up with a convincing argument as to why Hayden watches South Park (it's really not his thing and he certainly wouldn't quote it.).
The “memory” scene of Sage's, just between Hayden's attack and the start of the hospital scene, was added during edits…I just really like them as a couple and felt they needed another moment together.
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"She wrapped evil around her like a large, evil Mexican serape."